Pretend that someone else wrote it and actively look for flaws. Like someone wrote, girls don’t cum out of their asses. Xnxx com no matter how fat and ugly he was… 11 comments«123»Anonymous readerReport 2009-11-04 16:03:55A good start but short on logic. 11 comments«123»Anonymous readerReport 2009-11-04 16:03:55A good start but short on logic. A good story has to be told in a way that’s believable. Pretend that someone else wrote it and actively look for flaws. Furthermore, a sister being caught with the family dog’s cock buried in her cunt and fucking her doesn’t just smile amiably and say “Come here.” She’d be scared shitless for being busted. But because of it, she’d be easy to coerce into letting her brother fuck her… A good story has to be told in a way that’s believable. When you can’t find any, it’s ready to be submitted.Anonymous readerReport 2009-08-20 22:02:13wasn’t bad for your first oneAnonymous readerReport 2009-04-24 00:14:53More detail needed and needs better endingAnonymous readerReport 2009-04-23 01:34:54NO GOOD!!!!!!!!Anonymous readerReport 2009-04-22 19:08:58more detail and a little longer please, also you should try to include the mother in the next story that would be super hot«123» But because of it, she’d be easy to coerce into letting her brother fuck her… When you can’t find any, it’s ready to be
