It’s almost like you were master baring while writing, finished early so you slapped an ” I wasn’t ready for what was about to come” half assed ending.anonymous readerReport 2013-02-26 18:41:42good story apart from where you’re going with it – and you need a proof reader or an editor…or a spell checker, there’s a LOT of mistakes in there that have to be re-read to understand what you’re trying to say…other than that it’s not bad, you just need to expand it a bit and not rush through«1» It’s almost like you were master baring while writing, finished early so you slapped an ” I wasn’t ready for what was about to come” half assed ending.anonymous readerReport 2013-02-26 18:41:42good story apart from where you’re going with it – and you need a proof reader or an editor…or a spell checker, there’s a LOT of mistakes in there that have to be re-read to understand what you’re trying to say…other than that it’s not bad, you just need to expand it a bit and not rush through«1»
