That is before we move on to the writing, it is almost devoid of adjectives, and the descriptive writing (such as it is) is very pedestrian. The idea of the story is good, and I applaud anyone willing to complete a story that has stopped before it was finished, but in my opinion it needs a lot of work to live up to its potential. Xnxx sex There obviously needed to be a change in Narcissa and Belatrix but their basic natures have been lost, which makes the whole point of the story rather redundant. i love these stories and the other guy just kinda stopped half way thru. The idea of the story is good, and I applaud anyone willing to complete a story that has stopped before it was finished, but in my opinion it needs a lot of work to live up to its potential. Bellatrix is supposed to be as mad as a bucket; here she is more like a kindly whore. That is before we move on to the writing, it is almost devoid of adjectives, and the descriptive writing (such as it is) is very pedestrian.
