This is a good story to work with, continue? Xnxx com OHT- Thanks for the support, it’s always appreciated but I thought even the least tactful had something to say worth thinking about. I think I tried for too much when I tried to make the seperate thoughts read like dialogue in the first part. Add gratuitus sex to get more votes?cijababeReport 2011-03-08 03:16:25I loved it! I just assumed most people’s thoughts were choppy like mine. Cija-The story evolved like a shack turning into a mansion, my biggest regret was not making the POV changes read clearly. The sentences were a little short and choppy but that added to the style, and it was highly entertaining. redo this in Berlin, 1945ssaloReport 2011-03-11 01:06:44Thanks everyone. The spacing threw me a little but not enough to stop reading or to spoil my enjoyment. Keep writing and I’ll keep reading.«12345» This, NOT. This, NOT. Keep writing and I’ll keep reading.«12345» CijaonehandedtypistReport 2011-03-07 16:35:46Fuck the complainers ssalo. I think I should have only changed POV’s a couple of times there. I just assumed most people’s thoughts were choppy like mine. I just assumed most people’s thoughts were choppy like mine. Good writing, interesting plot, incest handled in a way that kept me reading,.
