Only place for this story is the trashanonymous readerReport 2013-04-01 07:26:20Personally I think that this story may have potential, although as stated in the previous comment by that other reader it seems that it is much like a ‘rough draft’ but I think that you can work from this. Quit wasting people’s time here you prissy little bitch. Xnxx tv This is an obvious attemp by a nigger who can’t read trying to put his sissy little fag thoughts out there for other homos. Quit wasting people’s time here you prissy little bitch. so more description and your good to go 🙂 and it is a good attempt so albeit the negative things I am assured if you work on it you can be great at this c:anonymous readerReport 2013-03-31 21:42:51This yet another example of how not to write stories. It seems more like when you read fanfiction and they have extra separate chapters containing sex scenes because it doesnt have much of a build up and happens all too quickly…although it is a fantasy try to think realistically about how a child may feel and also about Andrew what they both may be feeling and input those, also try to explain what is going on in more detail, your paragraphing is
