The storyline is opressively trite and it’s filled with minucia.Report 2014-08-24 23:52:18The basic story is good, but you really need to work on your spelling and grammar. Xnxx com Women need to stop shaving their pubes. It had a lot of potential but poor grammar and inarticulation made it boring and difficult to read. You keep using Your instead of You’re, cars don’t have breaks unless they’re broken, they have brakes, start each sentence with a capital, use punctuation for goodness sake! Try reading some Steven King for pace.Report 2016-08-04 20:32:44I gave you a negative rating because she had a shaved pussy. The storyline is opressively trite and it’s filled with minucia.Report 2014-08-24 23:52:18The basic story is good, but you really need to work on your spelling and grammar. Don’t stop writing, the stories are good, but please learn to use the correct words and punctuation.Report 2014-08-17 12:28:18A nice story,but you effed up by adding 10 inches of d gave a negative vote.«12345» The storyline is opressively trite and it’s filled with minucia.Report 2014-08-24 23:52:18The basic story is good, but you really need to work on your spelling and grammar.
