Idea of the story is great hopefully you have more ideas similar to this and you proofread and fix your future works before posting them. Wall of text makes it hard to read.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 16:44:58spell check, smaller paragraphs.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 15:18:31Always re-read your own stories before posting, I suggest reading them out loud to yourself, as this will reveal a large percentage of your mistakes. Xnxx sex At the very least wait a day or two and then re-read it your self. I like and prefer “good guy”, “hero” stories, especially when the assholes get what they deserve. 4 s«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 20:02:10Nice story despite misspellings. I would suggest that in the future you either get someone to proof read for you. I would suggest that in the future you either get someone to proof read for you. I was basically on long paragraph. I like and prefer “good guy”, “hero” stories, especially when the assholes get what they deserve. I was basically on long paragraph. Most were wrong words being used and some were sentences with words out of order and of course the most noticeable is the giant block of text which in itself is a pain to try and read even without having to try and decipher and figure
