I was basically on long paragraph. Xnxx Most were wrong words being used and some were sentences with words out of order and of course the most noticeable is the giant block of text which in itself is a pain to try and read even without having to try and decipher and figure out every lines screw ups. I would suggest that in the future you either get someone to proof read for you. At the very least wait a day or two and then re-read it your self. Most were wrong words being used and some were sentences with words out of order and of course the most noticeable is the giant block of text which in itself is a pain to try and read even without having to try and decipher and figure out every lines screw ups. I was basically on long paragraph. Idea of the story is great hopefully you have more ideas similar to this and you proofread and fix your future works before posting them. there where some many errors it was hard to follow the story. Wall of text makes it hard to read.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 16:44:58spell check, smaller paragraphs.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 15:18:31Always re-read your own stories before posting, I suggest reading them out
