I admit I didn’t make it even a third of the way through this story. 17 s«1234»robsterthefoxReport 2012-12-03 00:56:53Thanks everyone for your support and I am currently working on the second part of the story and it is looking to be pretty good. Xnxx Other than that, good job. I’m not saying give up, but you really need a lot of work if your going to produce quality literature.anonymous readerReport 2012-12-02 20:05:20Mistakes yes ! Way too choppy and hard to read. Way too choppy and hard to read. More please !«1234» You have numerous spelling and grammatical errors which should be obvious to you when you proof read your work. You definitely need an editor as well because your punctuation is truly in need of work!! More please !«1234» I’am very sorry about the weird A’s but they were not there when I submitted the stories so can any members on this that knows how i can take them out because i want all my stories to be the best for you guys.
