4 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 20:02:10Nice story despite misspellings. Xnxx I would suggest that in the future you either get someone to proof read for you. Wish there was more description in the beatings the assholes got and the after effects and reactions of others at the party, but maybe you’ll give us more in your next attempt.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 12:21:29While I applaud your effort. I like and prefer “good guy”, “hero” stories, especially when the assholes get what they deserve. there where some many errors it was hard to follow the story. Not a great attempt for a first try plenty of room for improving.«1» Not a great attempt for a first try plenty of room for improving.«1» I was basically on long paragraph. Most were wrong words being used and some were sentences with words out of order and of course the most noticeable is the giant block of text which in itself is a pain to try and read even without having to try and decipher and figure out every lines screw ups. Most were wrong words being used and some were sentences with words out of order and of course the most noticeable is the giant block of text which in itself is a pain to try and
