Not everything is so rosy..!Report 2009-10-17 22:27:39uhh . Xnxx sex 17 s«1234»anonymous readerReport 2012-02-12 14:15:08blIHbk Extremely easy by words but in reality�, a lot of things don`t correspond. good story i guess, spellcheck major, and make it longer, what kinky stuff did they do?Report 2009-02-23 13:12:30Maybe next time you should make up names because “Brother” and “sis” aren’t every realisticREADERReport 2008-01-22 17:08:53On the one hand, the others are right, this could do with a little polish, some elbow grease, and a spell checker. . Lol, wtf?«1234» There’s no need to take my advice, but i have been trying my hand at writing as well, and i find that while the first person perspective is difficult to manage at times, it feels better than a ‘watching from the sidelines’ perspective. My own rate about a 6/10, 7/10 for effort. Believe me, that’s higher than what i normally rate most of the stories i have read. Your next story should have a little more detail, and should be from the point of view of someone involved in the story itself from the beginning, not as someone who spied on them the first few times, then joined in later. good story i guess, spellcheck major, and make it longer, what kinky stuff did they do?Report 2009-02-23 13:12:30Maybe next
