8 s«12»anonymous readerReport 2013-06-15 12:57:58Spell checker would definitly help also checking grammaranonymous readerReport 2013-06-13 09:17:22I’m sure I would have liked your story if I could read it. Xnxx tv 8 s«12»anonymous readerReport 2013-06-15 12:57:58Spell checker would definitly help also checking grammaranonymous readerReport 2013-06-13 09:17:22I’m sure I would have liked your story if I could read it. I am sure it is not English. I was forced to rate your story a ZERO!anonymous readerReport 2013-06-13 07:26:44As everyone else is saying grammer and spelling however I like the story and was able to keep track right to the end, now I’m hoping you continue this as there are many different ways you could take this, could even be made into a short novel. Learn to spell, use a spell checker or write in your native language. please fix it and repost once corrected so can be enjoyed.«12» please fix it and repost once corrected so can be enjoyed.«12» You just need a proofreader in my opinion.anonymous readerReport 2013-06-13 06:48:44holy shit, sounded great to me at the beginning, near the end I couldn’t stand trying to make sense of it please revise this, or at least make the 2nd chapter tons better than this one because I couldn’t make heads or tales of the story near the endanonymous readerReport 2013-06-13
