I just assumed most people’s thoughts were choppy like mine. Sex xnxx lol
horny-I think maintaining a rotation through the characters is a good idea and ID’ing each POV change would probabily been the biggest improvement. u’r critics a PITA! lol
horny-I think maintaining a rotation through the characters is a good idea and ID’ing each POV change would probabily been the biggest improvement. Damn the consequences and space each paragraph as much as you want. 22 s«12345»anonymous readerReport 2011-03-20 08:22:23RpB/M: WTF! u’r critics a PITA! The choppiness was partly intentional and partly the best I could do. I just assumed most people’s thoughts were choppy like mine. OHT- Thanks for the support, it’s always appreciated but I thought even the least tactful had something to say worth thinking about. Don’t know about continuing. The spacing threw me a little but not enough to stop reading or to spoil my enjoyment. This is a good story to work with, continue?
