I’m not bagging on you, I’m just saying you’ve got a lot to work on. Xnxx tv To start, the tab key exists for a reason. 12 comments«123»anonymous readerReport 2013-04-04 21:09:15Lol, I was the first to read this cause the author is mah buddy. I find it hard to believe you would be satisfied with this story if you reread it yourself. I’m not bagging on you, I’m just saying you’ve got a lot to work on. Also, proofread your stories. Build up the story a lot more, create foreplay, make details, etc. 🙂 I liked it, it is rushed.anonymous readerReport 2013-03-29 14:32:38I really didn’t care for the ‘Rose’ character in this story. 12 comments«123»anonymous readerReport 2013-04-04 21:09:15Lol, I was the first to read this cause the author is mah buddy. Build up the story a lot more, create foreplay, make details, etc. Finally, if you are going to write a sex story, or any story for that matter, make the theme, in this case, the actual sex, take up more than 4 paragraphs.
