Work on that and other technical details, and you’ll do well. Work on that and other technical details, and you’ll do well. Sex xnxx :)Report 2009-07-13 22:35:08you got a good base for a story, now u just need more detail and for it to be much longer! 9 s«12»anonymous readerReport 2012-06-03 10:39:03Poor story with no plot or characterisationmtnguy70Report 2011-02-17 02:20:23Nice story, but too many commas, and they weren’t usually in the correct places. U need to put more detailReport 2009-01-14 21:06:20There is no god damn pop in a guy! Actually have sex before you write a story!«12» 9 s«12»anonymous readerReport 2012-06-03 10:39:03Poor story with no plot or characterisationmtnguy70Report 2011-02-17 02:20:23Nice story, but too many commas, and they weren’t usually in the correct places. U need to put more detailReport 2009-01-14 21:06:20There is no god damn pop in a guy! U need to put more detailReport 2009-01-14 21:06:20There is no god damn pop in a guy! U need to put more detailReport 2009-01-14 21:06:20There is no god damn pop in a guy! Actually have sex before you write a story!«12» Actually have sex before you write a story!«12» U missed the plot. 9 s«12»anonymous readerReport 2012-06-03 10:39:03Poor story with no plot or characterisationmtnguy70Report 2011-02-17 02:20:23Nice story, but too many commas, and they weren’t usually in the correct places.
