The twist was pretty good especially with her name but sort of saw it comming, but i didnt really care as it was a really good story. Xnxx But with the second part you should develop the relationship a bit. for me?(:Report 2010-04-01 11:36:23This story was GREAT. Confusing. for me?(:Report 2010-04-01 11:36:23This story was GREAT. I cant wait to read part two! But the twist, DAMN!!«12» The twist was pretty good especially with her name but sort of saw it comming, but i didnt really care as it was a really good story. Nice work :DDiViNaTiOnReport 2009-11-08 02:19:52Only thing I had the slightest problem with was you switched from thrid to first. The twist was pretty good especially with her name but sort of saw it comming, but i didnt really care as it was a really good story. 10 s«12»Report 2010-04-25 23:29:26Amazing story! Nice work :DDiViNaTiOnReport 2009-11-08 02:19:52Only thing I had the slightest problem with was you switched from thrid to first. 10 s«12»Report 2010-04-25 23:29:26Amazing story! But the twist, DAMN!!«12» I hope u write a 2nd one.Report 2009-11-27 10:58:18The switching between first and third person was a little confusing at first, but wasnt that bad. Confusing. But the twist, DAMN!!«12» Nice work :DDiViNaTiOnReport 2009-11-08 02:19:52Only thing I had the slightest problem with was you switched
